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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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the
figure
 of travellers of two different residing ways visiting a Caribbean
island
 from 2017 to 2017. The units of tourists were measured in
millions
. In terms of choosing to stay on cruise ships, the
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 of visitors
rised
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rose
risen
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 from about 0.25
millions
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 in 2010 to approximately 0.5
millions
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 in 2011, followed by a gradual decrease to around 0.25
millions
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 in 2012. After that, the number of travellers spending time
cruise
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 ships ascended stably to around 2
millions
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 in 2017. When it comes to the aspect of visitors staying on
island
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, the number of it remained the same at about 0.75
millions
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 from 2010 to 2011, followed by a considerable rise to about 1.5
millions
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. Notably, before fluctuating from 2016 to 2017, the
figure
of
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visiors
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visitors
also
 remained equally at around 1.5
milliions
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millions
million
. It was still noteworthy that in the middle time of 2015, the number of
vistors
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visitors
 staying on cruise ships surpassed that of
vistors
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visitors
 spending time on
island
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. In conclusion, the
figure
 of travellers visiting a Caribbean
island
at
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 total appeared
an
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 ascending trajectory from 2010 to 2017.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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