The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in ith a forecast for 2029.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in ith a forecast for 2029.
The graph illustrates the proportion of
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five different
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in
Brazil
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economy in 2009
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2019 and 2029
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it is clear that
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finance accounts for a considerable amount
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economic growth.
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the food processing and the manufacturing are the least.
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of the finance first, the trend of
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was on the rise in the past, with over one-third and over 35% respectively,
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it is expected to increase up to 40% in 2029. But the opposite trend can
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seen
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manufacturing. There were around 20% in 2009 and got down to just 15% in 2019.
This
figure will decrease again in a decade, at
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only
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5%. In terms of
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food processing and oil coal and gas, both of them achieved the highest ratio in 2019, at 22% and 32% respectively. The former
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will drop to around 10% and the latter will go back to a quarter again in 2029. At
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tourism offered more than 25% in 2009 but it will decrease by 5% and will remain at
this
level in 2029.
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