Recreational drugs should be legalized and there should be no punishments for people who use them. To what extent do you agree
There is an opinion about making recreational
drugs
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legally
and removing the fine for the users. I definitely disagree with Change the word
legal
this
argument for several reasons which will be explained in Linking Words
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this
following essay.
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To begin
with, medicines should be used to cure Linking Words
people
, not Use synonyms
for
solely Change preposition
apply
giving
pleasure. Scientists are Change the verb form
to give
giving
their best to improve Verb problem
doing
humanity
life by inventing healing items. Unfortunately, there are some bad Change noun form
humanity's
people
who want to disrespect their efforts by using Use synonyms
the
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apply
drugs
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for creating
some fantasy inside their brains. Change preposition
to create
As a result
, Linking Words
while
some sick individuals are becoming healthy, Linking Words
the
healthy individuals are getting sick because of consuming the Correct article usage
apply
drugs
falsely. Use synonyms
For example
, there were many Linking Words
people
who died because of Use synonyms
drug
overdose, mainly because of eating it Add an article
a drug
as
an attempt to achieve happiness.
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in
Moreover
, by erasing punishments for illegal Linking Words
drugs
Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
heroine
and cocaine, Correct your spelling
heroin
this
action will increase the number of Linking Words
people
who want to try those degenerative but addictive items because they do not have anything to fear anymore. Use synonyms
Consequently
, there will be many victims, not only adults but Linking Words
also
youngsters. Linking Words
For instance
, the strict rule of drug usage has prevented many students who are afraid to be jailed and have their future destroyed. Linking Words
However
, when Linking Words
this
regulation is deleted, many young adults will try something that they have never tasted in their entire Linking Words
life
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lives
such
as Linking Words
those
fantasy Correct determiner usage
apply
drugs
. Use synonyms
At the end
of the day, more teens will fall into the addiction of these dangerous medical things and harm their bright potential to Linking Words
success
in the future.
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succeed
To conclude
, I strongly dispute Linking Words
this
statement because it will reverse the holy goals of medical inventors Linking Words
that
lead Correct pronoun usage
apply
into
more diseases which need to be handled and it will hurt the quality of Change preposition
to
next
generations because of more addicted students.Correct article usage
the next
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Revise the introduction and conclusion to ensure they accurately reflect the essay’s content and stance. The introduction should clearly state your position regarding the prompt, and the conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your thesis in light of the evidence presented.