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the bar chart below shows the top ten countrie for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

the bar chart below shows the top ten countrie for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The column chart illustrates the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 in ten different countries in the year 2014.
Overall
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, in 2014, Chinese people were the largest
electricity
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 consumers and producers,
whereas
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 Korean people had the lowest
consumption
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 and
production
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 of
electricity
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 in the same year.
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, Americans placed the second highest consumer and producer of
electricity
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. In 2014, the
production
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 of
electricity
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 in nine countries was more than its
consumption
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.
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, Germans were an exception in
this
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 case. In China, the figures for
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 were the highest at 5,398
billion
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kWh
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 and 5322
billion
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kWh
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, respectively.
By contrast
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, the numbers for consumed and produced
electricity
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 in Korea were the smallest at 449
billion
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kWh
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 and 485
billion
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kWh
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, respectively.
Furthermore
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, America was the second largest producer and consumer of
electricity
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 at 4099
billion
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kWh
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 and 3866
billion
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kWh
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, respectively. It is worth noting that Germany was the only country in which the
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 was more than the
production
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 of it at 582
billion
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kWh
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 compared to 526
billion
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kWh
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, electricity, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • gigawatt hours (GWh)
  • renewable energy sources
  • non-renewable energy sources
  • industrialization
  • economic activities
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainability
  • energy efficiency
  • power generation
  • grid capacity
  • energy policies
  • consumption patterns
  • energy demand
  • production-consumption disparity
  • environmental impact
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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