The chart below shows the Japanese's population by age groups starting in 1960 and including forecast to 2040.

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the

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Japan's people by age stages beginning in 1960 and maintaining a

predict

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to 2040 Looking from an

overall

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perspective, It is readily apparent that 0-14 aged

childrens

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are

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started from 30 in the first year,

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it is slightly decreased since 1970 and it is predicted to be down to 10

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the end of the period.

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, Citizens aged between 15 to 64

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appeared just over 60 to 70 in 1970

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almost unchanged until

following

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the following

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thirty years.

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Although

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noticeable

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a noticeable

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fall

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during 2000-2040. As for remaining, Over 65 residents

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just above 10

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the beginning of the period and over 65 aged people groups climbed significantly to the end of the given period

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Mar 8, 2024

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In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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