The chart below shows the Japanese's population by age groups starting in 1960 and including forecast to 2040.

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Japan's people by age stages beginning in 1960 and maintaining a

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to 2040 Looking from an

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started from 30 in the first year,

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appeared just over 60 to 70 in 1970

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during 2000-2040. As for remaining, Over 65 residents

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the beginning of the period and over 65 aged people groups climbed significantly to the end of the given period

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