The chart below shows the Japanese's population by age groups starting in 1960 and including forecast to 2040.

#japanese #population #age #groups #forecast

The given information illustrates

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

Japan's people by age stages beginning in 1960 and maintaining a

predict

Replace the word

prediction

show examples

to 2040 Looking from an

overall

perspective, It is readily apparent that 0-14 aged

childrens

Correct your spelling

children

show examples

are

Unnecessary verb

apply

show examples

started from 30 in the first year,

However

it is slightly decreased since 1970 and it is predicted to be down to 10

Change preposition

show examples

the end of the period.

On the other hand

, Citizens aged between 15 to 64

Unnecessary verb

apply

show examples

appeared just over 60 to 70 in 1970

then

Wrong verb form

was

show examples

almost unchanged until

following

Correct article usage

the following

show examples

thirty years.

Altough

Correct your spelling

Although

there is

noticeable

Correct article usage

a noticeable

show examples

fall

happened

Correct pronoun usage

that happened

show examples

during 2000-2040. As for remaining, Over 65 residents

are begun

Wrong verb form

began

show examples

just above 10

Change the preposition

show examples

the beginning of the period and over 65 aged people groups climbed significantly to the end of the given period

Submitted by Zolboo on Fri Mar 08 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.

▼

Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

▼

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

▼

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

130 words

<40

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7
band
The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Have you ever thought about what our lives would look like without science? Although there may be immense objectives for scientific development, the most imperative goal is enhancing human lives. I, personally agree with this statement.
7
band
Some environmentalists have advocated building wildlife sanctuaries to protect endangered species. Discuss the Advantages and disadvantages of doing this.
Some environmental experts have supported the construction of conservation areas to protect animals from the hazard of extinction. Whether sanctuaries are harmful or beneficial will be explored in the following paragraphs.
5.5
band
Nowadays, most countries improve the standard of living through economic development. But some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of the phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?
World economic development has rescued many people out of deprivation and brought a better life, whereas most of people believed this trend leads to the loss of cultural values. In my perspective, this trend has more merits and demerits which are manageable to cope with.
6.5
band
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
In recent times, environmental problems have become a trending issue all over the world. While it is argued that the loss of different animals and plants is one of the most concerning problems, others think that air pollution and global warming should be considered more alarming problems.
4.5
band
It is important for travellers and business people to understand the cultures they come into contact with, however briefly. What are the main advantages of doing so? What do you think is the main disadvantage of not doing so?
It is argued that travellers and businessmen must educate themselves on the culture they interact with. Every culture is uniqe and has its own principles, as humans we are responsible to understand and respect the cultures we come into contact with. Natives welcoming you to their country and being a role model is one of the advantages, whereas, being despised and hated by the people and receiving backlash is the disadvatngae.

The chart below shows the Japanese's population by age groups starting in 1960 and including forecast to 2040.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some environmentalists have advocated building wildlife sanctuaries to protect endangered species. Discuss the Advantages and disadvantages of doing this.

Nowadays, most countries improve the standard of living through economic development. But some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of the phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?

It is important for travellers and business people to understand the cultures they come into contact with, however briefly. What are the main advantages of doing so? What do you think is the main disadvantage of not doing so?