The bar chart below shows the population aged 65 and over of three countries in 1980 and 2000 and prediction in 2030
The given information illustrates Japan's people by age stages beginning in 1960 and maintaining a prediction to 2040
Looking from an
overall
perspective, It is readily apparent that 0-14 aged children started
from 30 in the first year, Wrong verb form
start
However
it Add a comma
However,
is
slightly decreased since 1970 and it is predicted to be down to 10 by the end of the period.
Unnecessary verb
apply
On the other hand
, Citizens aged between 15 to 64 appeared just over 60 to 70 in 1970 then
it was almost unchanged until the following thirty years. Although
there is a noticeable fall that happened during 2000-2040.
As for remaining, Over 65 residents began just above 10 at the beginning of the period and over 65 aged people groups climbed significantly to the end of the given periodSubmitted by Zolboo on
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