In many countries nowadays, more and more women have full-time jobs as men, so there is logic that men and women should share the housework tasks equally. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
several countries across the world, its is been observed that the number of females who
work
full are
twice that of the males, so some are of the opinion that household chores should be divided equally among Correct subject-verb agreement
is
both
genders. This
essay will discuss what thoughts towards this
topic is
.
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
To begin
, before modern times, women are
known to be just Wrong verb form
were
house wives
, minding the home ,taking care of the kids and preparing meals, Correct your spelling
housewives
as well as
performing their conjugal duties, while
a man's duty is to protect, Correct word choice
and provides
provides
for his family. That ideology Correct subject-verb agreement
provide
have
CHANGED , as the world keeps developing. More women have become Change the verb form
has
work educated
and now hold positions in governmental establishments same as the opposite gender making it difficult to Add a hyphen
work-educated
both
go to work
and coming
home to Wrong verb form
come
fully
involved in family affairs. So Add a missing verb
be fully
therefore
, the men helping out will reduce stress on their wives, division
of labour means more quality family time, it Correct word choice
and division
also
encourages that children will have the attention of both
parents. For example
, a child whose mother and father pays
more attention toCorrect subject-verb agreement
pay
,
is better behaved and happy than those who lack parental attention making them feel unloved. Remove the comma
apply
Also
, division allows them to work
as well as
add to the finances of homes making it possible to meet up with their expenditures.
Sharing chores will also
reduce stress on both
parties involved, and they will be better able to improve their relationships without feeling neglected. For instance
, a husband and wife who have the free time to communicate even though both
are busy but help each other out,
will be able to resolve immediately and find ways to drawer close that way reducing the distraction Remove the comma
apply
that's comes
with talking with someone other than their spouse, avoid extra- Marital affairs when Change the verb form
that comes
such
arises.
In conclusion , many are of the thoughts
that a woman should stick to what women Fix the agreement mistake
thought
are
known for in earlier eras, the world is changing and so are humans, I agree that there should be Wrong verb form
were
division
of labour in the family, as that will improve communication, ensure additional income, Add an article
a division
the division
as well as
ease stress on one individual.Submitted by drphibs23 on
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