Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

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These days tutees prefer to
study
other
subjects
than science fields like
medical
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and engineering branches and
this
issue is epidemic
to
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all states.
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, as
it
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seen in modern days students know what they want to become and
study
in future.
For
instance
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a
child
in
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young age who plays with
lego
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and
try
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to build a
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, house or building shows that kid is talented in
construction
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field and it is important that parents pay attention to
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creativity of their
child
because a kid can
analysis
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environment from
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young age and can makes ways of how he or she can process and that means what they can do better. But
on the other hand
, in
old
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days parents
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their
child
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children
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to
study
medical and science
subjects
or
eventually
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they must become a
doctor
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or engineering and if they
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some other
subjects
for
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study
it meant that the
child
could not handle hard
subjects
and the kid is not that smart or intelligent.But the truth is there is no force for everybody to
study
science
subjects
because there are more fields that even can be more money
maker
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than other branches
such
as Graphic
designer
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,Photography,Fashion
designer
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,Painter,Web
developer
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and so on.
Therefore
, in
this
world
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world,
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there are so many
subjects
that can
be
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study
and can be a career which is fine and a person who has aptitude can become professional in it. In conclusion,
this
issue is not a problem but it is a changing
in
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all around the world for
subjects
that could not
been
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seen in these years and parents should encourage their beloved children
of
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what they truly desire to
study
and wish to become.
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