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The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph compares the data about the amount of
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museum
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museum's
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museum
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visitors
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visitor
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visitors
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 in the United Kingdom during two
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seasons
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season
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seasons
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 over a year period.
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, there is a significant difference in the quantity of the people entering museum in the
summer
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 and the
winter
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wintertime
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time
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. The majority of the visitors tended to go to
museum
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museums
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 during the
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summer
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summertime
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time
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. As is shown in the line graph, the number of
the
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visitor
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visitors
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 rocketed to above 1200 people at 11 o'
clock
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 during
summer
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time
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.
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, it rose steadily and reached
to
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its peak
at
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in
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 the middle of the day. Since
then
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, there
was
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 a
decline
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declining
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 trend until the end of its closing
time
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 at 18 o'
clock
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. In
constrast
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contrast
, the figure
shown
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 the amount of
the
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visitors was only 400 at 10 o'
clock
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 during winter. Even though it witnessed a slight decline at 11 o'
clock
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,
it've
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it
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 managed to climb
into
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to
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 around 500 people in the middle of the day. Following the trend
on
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in
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 the
summer
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, it
also
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 experienced
the
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 stable decrease afterwards.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words summer, time, clock with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Average number of visitors
  • Museum
  • Summer
  • Winter
  • Trends
  • Peaks
  • Lows
  • Month-by-month analysis
  • Increases
  • Decreases
  • Stability
  • Attendance
  • Comparisons
  • Disparity
  • Similarity
  • Concluding figures
  • Key findings
  • Notable
  • Surprising
  • Expected outcomes
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