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In most countries around the world, children begin learning the English language at school from the primary level. What are the advantages and disadvantages of teaching the English language to children at an early age?

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Learning
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forigen langauage
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foreign language
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children
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 is easier than in
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an adult
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adult
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adults
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.
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English
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The English
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language
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 is the most popular
language
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 around the world.
This
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 is why most countries tend to teach the
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language
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 at begin of school
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 the
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. There are many advantages and
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 of learning the
English
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language
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 to
children
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 at an early age. In
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to study
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 another mother
language
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 at begin of school. Easily accept any
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language
 at an early age of
children
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 that enhances on
thier
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their
 cognitive development.
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, it can improve cognitive skills,
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 as problem-solving and creative thinking.
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, learning a second
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language
 can make
a good future career prospects
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good future career prospects
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. Proficiency in
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, a global lingua franca, can open up various opportunities in international fields. Aid in the
devlopment
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development
 of cultural
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awareness
, exposure to the
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language
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 can encourage
children
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 to learn about and appreciate different cultures. Meanwhile,
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focusing
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 may lead to diminished proficiency in a child's native
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. Another
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disadvantages
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disadvantage
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 is that creates
an unequal opportunities
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unequal opportunities
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 for
indvidual
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individuals
because not all families or schools may have the resources to provide quality
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 education, leading to disparities in learning outcomes. Possible cognitive overload - For some
children
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, learning a new
language
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 at an early age might be overwhelming, affecting their
overall
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 learning experience. In conclusion, learning the most important
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is
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English
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 makes a better difference
at
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in
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 individual life. in my
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opinion
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although
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 there are pit of
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but
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they are not so matter against
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the advantages
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 that make
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a real
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diffrent
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difference
different
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live
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.

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Focus on organizing your essay clearly with distinct paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Use cohesive devices (e.g., however, furthermore, in addition) effectively to link ideas and paragraphs.
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Ensure you fully address the task by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of the topic in equal measure.
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Develop your points fully with specific examples and detailed explanations to support your argument.
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Consider revising your conclusion to better summarize your points and reflect a balanced view of the advantages and disadvantages.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • creative thinking
  • problem-solving
  • proficiency
  • global lingua franca
  • career prospects
  • cultural awareness
  • mother tongue
  • disparities
  • cognitive overload
  • linguistic diversity
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • pedagogical approaches
  • curriculum design
  • language acquisition
  • global mobility
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