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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart illustrates the consequence of
a
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an
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examine
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about
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of
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coffee
 and tea buying and drinking customs in 5 cities in Australia namely
Sydney
, Melbourne,
Brisbane
, Adelaide and Hobart As the graph shows, the percentages of buying and drinking
coffee
 and tea
was
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were
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 a steady increase with some fluctuation. The number of fresh
coffee
 which was bought in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks in
Brisbane
lowest
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was lowest
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while
Sydney
 highest. In terms of
Bought
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Buying
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 fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks, there was a significant variation. In
Sydney
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Sydney,
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 it is around 44% and Melbourne
have
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 lower than
Sydney
 about 2% is 42%.
This
 number
continue
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 to decrease from 42% to 34% in
Brisbane
. Adelaide has approximately the same percentage as
Brisbane
. In
Hobart
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Hobart,
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 it has a slight higher about 38%. To say about Bought instant
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks, it has over 45% in
Sydney
 and higher in Melbourne is 48%.
This
 number
also
 rise to 53% in
Brisbane
.
Then
, have a slow fall from 53 in
Brisbane
 to 50% in Adelaide. And in Hobart it climb to 54%. Regarding the data of
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sydney, brisbane with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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