The diagrams below give information about the manufacutre of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacutre of frozen fish pies.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture illustrates the process of production of frozen fish pies.
Overall
, potato production takes longer to deliver
in
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compared with fresh salmon. The potatoes and the
fishes
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fish
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go into different mechanisms in order to be dispatched by boiling and steaming in the oven respectively.
To begin
with, potatoes take about one month to be delivered
then
they go into various
processesincluding
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processes including
cleaning, peeling, slicing,
boilling
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boiling
billing
, chilling and eventually
staring
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starting
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, which will be wrapped with prepared sauce from the fresh salmon.
Furthermore
, the fish takes about 12 hours or less to reach the manufactury. Started by adding lemon juice and salt
then
putting it on the steam oven. After that, workers will remove the skins and bones pass them on to the inspector
then
add the prepared peas.
Lastly
, when the sauce is prepared it will be combined with the stared potatoes
then
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and then
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freezed
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frozen
to take it to the stores.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • process
  • unload
  • packaging
  • initial phase
  • sorting
  • cleaning
  • cooking
  • bone removal
  • mixture
  • subsequent stage
  • filling
  • distribution
  • manual labor
  • automated processes
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