The three pie charts illustrate how many hours undergraduates, postgraduates and total student population spent in a British university library.

The three pie charts illustrate how many hours undergraduates, postgraduates and total student population spent in a British university library.
The three pie charts compare the time that undergraduates,
postgraduates
and all
of
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the students spend in a British college
library
.
Besides
, there are three different time expenditures including
one
hour to
seven
hours
,8
hours
to 14
hours
and above 15
hours
.
Overall
, the vast majority of students spent
one
to
seven
hours
in the British college
library
, whilst most of the
postgraduates
spent over 15
hours
.
According to
the information shown in the graph, 50% of the total student population spent
one
to
seven
hours
in the
library
and only 15% of them stayed there for over 15
hours
.
On the other hand
, 63% of undergraduates stayed in the
library
for
one
to
seven
hours
which was
seven
times higher than those who were in
library
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for more than 15
hours
. What should be particularly mentioned is that 51% of
postgraduates
spent over 15
hours
in the
library
and 32% of them spent eight to fourteen
hours
there which was almost as twofold as those
postgraduates
who spent
one
to
seven
hours
in the
library
.
To sum up
, it can be
apparently
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that
postgraduates
spent more time in the
library
than other students.
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