The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Given is a diagram, illustrating the process by which,
sugar
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is generated from cane. It is evident from the information provided that there are three main phases involved. The first stage of
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process entails planting
sugar
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cane, which takes approximately one year to one year and a half to be grown and prepared for harvest. There are two main ways for harvesting these commodities either by giant agricultural machinery or traditionally by hand. In the second stage of
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process, Crushing
sugar
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cane, the acquired juice is purified by a Limestone filter in order to separate the impurities. To convert
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juice to a thick syrup, the filtered juice is purred into an enormous evaporator, and exposed to heat to evaporate the reluctant water in it. In the third and final phase, to separate
sugar
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crystals from the liquid syrup, they are
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centrifuged, prior to drying and cooling these grains. So, it is ready to be sent to the market and consumed by customers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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