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The climograph below shows average monthly temperatures and rainfall in the city of Kolkata. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The climograph illustrates the city of Kolkata was to have variations in warmth and rainfall every month. Precipitation and humidity were calculated monthly.
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, the first and foremost major change in the precipitation was approx 350mm and the warmth was around 35 in July. The minor effect of the evaporation was about 25mm and the condition was nearly 2 at the start and end of the year.
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, from January fog formation increased continuously till July month.
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, the first four months were under 50
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 and the humidity was
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 rapidly from 20 Celcius to 30 Celcius.
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, fog formation was increased by 100
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 and the climate was 10 in May.
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, abruptly bloomed about 250
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changed by 25 in June.
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, fog formation now decreased by 320
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 the humidity was about 32 degrees in August and the warmth remained the same in the next month.
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, the abrupt decrease by 150
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 and hot weather
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 shot down by 15 Celsius.
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Task Achievement
To improve your Task Achievement score, ensure that your response comprehensively addresses all parts of the task. Focus on clearly presenting the main features of the climograph, including significant trends and comparisons. Incorporate specific details and examples to support your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
For a better score in Coherence and Cohesion, aim to organize your essay more logically. Use clear introductory and concluding statements to frame your analysis. Employ cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs smoothly, enhancing the overall flow of your text.
Clarity and Terminology
To enhance clarity and comprehensibility, pay attention to accurate terminology and avoid confusing phrases. Instead of 'fog formation,' use terms directly related to the data presented, such as 'precipitation' or 'rainfall.' Also, ensure clarity in expressing temperature changes and rainfall levels to avoid ambiguity.

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