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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows information about the average
income
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 of
families
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 in one country in 1968 and in 2018.
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, in the given period, most
families
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 spent their
income
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 on food in 1968, and most
families
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 spent their
income
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 on leisure in 2018.
According to
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 the chart, in 1968, there are 35
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percent
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 of
families
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 spent their
income
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 on food,
while
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 there are only around 17
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percent
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 of
families
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 spent their
income
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 on food in 2018. In 2018, about 22
percent
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 of
families
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 spent their
income
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 on leisure which increased around 13
percent
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 from the
families
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 who spent their
income
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 on leisure in 1968. There are 10
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percent
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 of
families
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 spent their
income
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 on both housing and clothing in 1968. The percentage of
families
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 who spent
income
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 on housing increased from 10
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percent
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 to about 19
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percent
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.
on the other hand
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, the percentage of
families
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 who spent
income
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 on clothing and footwear decreased from 10
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percent
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 to 5
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percent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, families, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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