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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate.
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The given chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the quantity of magazines sold by
induvidual
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individual
person
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people
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 in five different countries from 2003 to 2007. The chart shows the quantity of
magazine
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magazines
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 sold
individual
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by individual
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person
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people
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 in
country
 E in all
the
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apply
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three years is lower and if we talk about higher
then
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than
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compition
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competition
in
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apply
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between
two
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the two
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country
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countries
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 which
is
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are
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country
 A and
country
B
numbers
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number
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 of
magazine
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magazines
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 sold
in
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apply
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between
these
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this two country
these two countries
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two
country
 in 2003 to 2007 are slightly similar. In the given chart number of
sold
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the sold
a sold
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magazine
 in county E is very low in 2003 and
2007
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in 2007
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 is nearly about 3 or in
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the mid
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mid year
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mid-year
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 2005 which is nearly 5 slighter much
highe
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higher
then
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than
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 other
two
year
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years
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.The higher number of
magazine
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magazines
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 sold by
country
B
 in three
year
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years
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 which much more higher
then
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than
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 if we
comapred
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compared
compare
 to
other
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the other
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 four
country
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countries
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.In
country
B
magazine
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magazines
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 sold in 2003 is touched
to
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apply
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50 or 2005 which little bit lower
then
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than
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2003
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in 2003
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 which
is
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was
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 approx 48 and in 2007 about 44.
Then
the
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country
 A comes and the sold
magazine
 numbers differences is very
neggilble
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negligible
 as compared to
country
B
. In
country
 A in 2003 48
magazine
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magazines
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sold
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were sold
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 and in 2005 45
magazine
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magazines
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sold
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were sold
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 or in 2007 43
magazine
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magazines
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sold
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were sold
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.After
country
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countries
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 A and
B
 The C and D
magazine
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magazines
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 sold
is
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are
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 in decreasing order lower numbers of
magazine
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magazines
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 sold in
these
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this two country
these two countries
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two
country
 which is in
country
 D in 2003 and the number is nearly 17 and 23 in 2007 and 20 in 2005 or in
country
 C 35 in 2003,33 in 2005 and 32 in 2005.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words magazine, country, two, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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