Many people believe that education standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

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age and day, education has become a particularly salient aspect of

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life. As we know

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. As stated, some people think that there is no good education provided on

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writing

, speaking and reading.

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and solutions for

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are not found to be

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university students.

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do not have anything practical. The study shows that

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number of youngsters find science and history far more interesting rather than, literature and calculation.

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generation is interested in research and

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as a good

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teaching these subjects who could help students to build interest in these subjects.

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, these causes have to be cured by ensuring some positive measures. The first is that the government should initiate that all colleges and universities should be involved in performing seminars and debates related to

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current issues.

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should increase the job salaries and

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the current generation falls to

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high salary jobs to lead a

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role in order to generate

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these subjects.

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life. If these issues are not solved

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Ensure the introduction clearly presents the topic and outlines your position. The introduction in your essay introduces the topic but could be more concise in stating the problem and your stance.

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Aim to present clear, distinct ideas in each paragraph, ensuring each is directly related to the essay's question or statement. Some paragraphs merge multiple ideas, which can be confusing.

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Include specific examples to support every main point you make. While you have referred to 'studies', providing concrete, real-world examples or statistics would strengthen your argument.

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Varied vocabulary

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