The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Improving
people
's life
should be the main goal of Fix the agreement mistake
lives
science
.In my opinion, i
agree that Change the capitalization
I
science
plays a major role in improving peoples
health and lifestyle.Change noun form
people's
Science
and technology hepls
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help
people
in different ways from finding new drugs for complicated diseases to finding new devices to make people
's life
easy.
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lives
Science
has created a major impact on peoples
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people's
life
.Fix the agreement mistake
lives
In
the Change preposition
At
begining
of the Correct your spelling
beginning
century
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century,
people
were not aware about
certain diseases and how they Change the preposition
of
can
be treated. In the following Wrong verb form
could
years
many Add a comma
years,
scientist
with their knowledge found new drugs and medicine to treat the diseases. Change to a plural noun
scientists
For instance
, back in Correct article usage
the 1990's
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1990
1990's
there was no cure for breast cancer but in the following years in the 21st century scientists and doctors have found Add a comma
1990's,
appropriated
treatment for breast cancer by inducing chemotherapy and performing mastectomy in Replace the word
appropriate
this
case the patient can live a normal life
.
Science
has also
made peope
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people
life
easy by
the upcoming technology. Change preposition
with
For example
, the invention of cleaning robots has significantly made people
's life
easier Fix the agreement mistake
lives
also
the invention of artificial intelligences
which is used by Change the wording
intelligence
bits of intelligence
people
nowadays as a major application.It makes people
's work easier therefore
people
do not need to work for long hours although
science
has many different types of advantages it also
has disadvantages. For instance
, improving in demand of
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for
artifical
intelligence can decrease the need Correct your spelling
artificial
of
manpower which leads to unemployment and reduced Change preposition
for
salary
for certain jobs that can be done by Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
a.i
. Correct your spelling
AI
This
makes peoples
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people's
life
more difficult.
In conclusion,science
plays a major role in peoples
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people's
life
by improving their health Fix the agreement mistake
lives
by
the discovery of new drugs and surgeries and it Change preposition
through
also
makes people
's life
easier Fix the agreement mistake
lives
by
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through
invention
of certain gadgets Add an article
the invention
although
it has certain advantages it also
has disadvantages like unemployment.Submitted by m.keerthanah on
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