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The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table given illustrates the percentage of
student
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students
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 studying in various types of secondary
school
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schools
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 over a nine-year period from 2000 to 2009. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the proportion of
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children
 taking part in Community
Schools
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 saw an upward trend,
while
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 a reverse pattern can be observed in the remaining
schools
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. In 2000, the percentage of pupils joining Voluntary-Controlled
Schools
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 was highest, at 52%. The data on Grammar
Schools
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 was lower, just under
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 quarter. Specialist
Schools
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 and Community
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,
however
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, both accounted for the lowest proportion, at 12%. In the following years, the proportion of students enrolling in Community
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 sharply rose to 32% in the following five years before reaching a peak of 58% in 2009.
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, there was a slight decrease in the figure for Specialist
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 to only 10% over the same time frame. Meanwhile, the percentage of pupils attending Voluntary-Controlled
Schools
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 gradually fell from 38% in 2005 to 20% in the final year, compared to 12% in that of Grammar
Schools
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 the end of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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