You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the
number
of
visitors
visiting a museum at a particular
time
of
two
sessions
summer
and
winter
in a particular period of year in 2003. The graph shows that in
summertime
Add an article
the summertime
show examples
there is a high
number
of
visitors
visiting in gallery
according to
time
or in
winter
session
number
of
visitors
visit
in
Correct article usage
a zig
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zig zag
Add a hyphen
zig-zag
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pattern with respect to
time
. In the given graph
two
lines describing
two
sessions
summer
and
winter
which show how many
visitors
visit
a museum with respect to
time
from
time
0 to 1800.In the
winter
session
higher
number
of
visitors
visit
in the
summer
session
when the
time
is nearly between 1100 to 1200 approx 1500
visitors
visit
the museum and from that point of
time
that is
the peak
time
when
visitors
visit
in the
summer
session
.
On the other hand
, if we talk about
winter
Correct article usage
the winter
show examples
session
visitors
number
is quite lower
Change preposition
than in then
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then
Correct your spelling
the
show examples
summer
session
.In the
winter
session
high
Change the article
a high
the high
show examples
number
of
visitors
visit
between 1000 to 1100 and 1100 to 1200. In these
two
particular times
visitors
numbersvisitor
Change noun form
'
show examples
number
Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
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are the same which is nearly about 600 after that
number
of
visitors
declines
according to
time
and after 1400
time
visitor
numbersnumber
Replace the word
numbers are
show examples
constant.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, time, two, summer, winter, session, visit with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Peak season
  • Off-peak season
  • Visitor influx
  • Steady increase
  • Significant drop
  • Month-on-month comparison
  • Seasonal variation
  • Cultural attraction
  • Tourism trends
  • Historical data
  • Visitor demographics
  • Analytical observation
  • Comparative analysis
  • Statistical evidence
  • Conclusive summary
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