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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie chart below provide information about the change in tourist numbers and satisfaction before and after Ashdown
Museum
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's refurbishment.
Overall
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, before the renovation, most
people
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 felt disappointed about the
museum
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,
while
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 after the renovation, the
museum
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 not only witnessed a dramatic growth in the number of visitors but
also
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 boosted visitors' gratification. To be specific, the number of visitors climbed significantly from 74,000 to 92,000 after the transformation. Notably, most
people
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 felt dissatisfied and very dissatisfied with the old
museum
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, with 40 and 10, respectively;
however
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, both negative moods reduced strikingly over half to 15 and 5 after the
museum
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 was renewed.
On the other hand
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, in comparison with dissatisfaction, there was an upward trend of
people
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's satisfied vibes during the year after refurbishment. In terms of
people
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's satisfaction, those who reported feeling very satisfied more than doubled from 15 to 35; meanwhile, those who felt satisfied only increased slightly by 10 to 40. It is noticeable that
people
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 got more fulfilment about the revamped
museum
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.
In addition
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 to no response
people
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, the value of which remained the same at 5 during the given year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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