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The maps show Pacific Railway Station station in 1998 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show Pacific Railway Station station in 1998 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps
illusturate
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illustrate
 Pacific Railway
Station
 as it appears
1998
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 and now. On the whole, the changes include the addition of several facilities, an
increace
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increase
 in rails numbers, and the removal of some buildings. The
station
 of 1998 has four rails
in
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on
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 the platform on the right
side
 of the
station
. There
are
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is
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 a cafe, a shop and
ticket
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a ticket
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 office beside the platform. And toilets had been set mid-left
side
 of the
station
. Looking at the current
station
, it reveals that the platform including three rails has been added on the left
side
 of the
station
. And a supermarket has been established at the corner of
left-hand
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the left-hand
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side
.
In addition
, a
rstaurant
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restaurant
 and two shops
has
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 been built between the new and former
plat forms
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platforms
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. The shop which has been between the ticket office and the cafe has been removed and the ticket office has been enlarged in its size.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words station, side with synonyms.
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