Some people think visitors to other countries should imitate local customs and behaviour. Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the two views and give your opinion.
It has been common to travel abroad for unique experiences.
According to
this
activity, there are a variety of opinions about whether the
tourists should obey local Correct article usage
apply
customs
and behaviour or not.
First of all, advocates who should follow local customs
have been explained that respecting local customs
and behavior
is an essential and compulsory thing. They contend that Change the spelling
behaviour
foreigners
from other countries
were already ready to accept new visiting countries
's customs
. That attitude is essential for foreigners
. For example
, if some people have to visit totally
different Correct article usage
a totally
another
Correct quantifier usage
apply
country
, they tend to prepare clothes for the country
's favors
. Change the spelling
favours
They
Correct pronoun usage
It
is
believed that Change the verb form
are
this
attitude is manner
for Add an article
a manner
the manner
traveling
.
Change the spelling
travelling
However
, opponents to this
opinion tend to have another thought. They believe that host
Correct article usage
the host
country
should respect foreigners's
Change noun form
foreign
culture
from other Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
countries
. For the
more visitors visiting the attractive places, the better for the Change preposition
The
country
's income. That's why the host country
have to
decent and common places for Wrong verb form
has
foreigners
like restaurants and clubs.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that diversity
Replace the word
diverse
customs
from a variety of countries
have to be sustained as long as possible. That's because it is the
likely to be not attractive anymore if all Change the article
apply
customs
and cultures are same
. We have to protect our charming and various places to be seen for a long time Correct article usage
the same
such
as religions and languages including customes
.Correct your spelling
customers
customer
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Task Achievement
Ensure that your essay clearly addresses both views and your opinion throughout the essay. Start with an introduction that sets the stage for the discussion, followed by clear, distinct paragraphs for each view, and conclude with a strong, personal opinion reinforcing your stance.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on clarity and simplicity in expressing ideas. Avoid overly complex sentences that could potentially confuse the reader. Aim for concise and clear sentences that convey your points effectively.
Task Achievement
Support your arguments with specific examples or reasons. While you have provided some examples, aiming for more detailed and relevant examples will strengthen your argument and make your essay more convincing.
Coherence and Cohesion
Focus on the logical flow of your essay. Use transition words and phrases to link sentences and paragraphs effectively. This approach will help maintain coherence and guide the reader through your arguments smoothly.
Your opinion
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