Young people spend less of their free time with their family nowadays. What are the reasons for this? Are there more negative or positive sides to this trend?

In
this
age and era, family is one of the basic
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of an
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individual
. Most people have different perspectives
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spending
time
in their
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with
families
.
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number of people think that
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sitting with
families
is the best for
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society
while
others believe that, it is a
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of
time
.
This
essay will state the reasons
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why today's generation
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less
time
with parents and
this
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negative
effect on the nation.
To begin
with, youth like to spend most of their
time
with peers
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outside
rather than, in
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with parents and relatives.
In addition
to
this
, youngsters
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prefer to spend their leisure
time
in their personal rooms playing games or reading books.
Apart from
this
, both parents are employed and are busy earning money for day-to-day life which
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the relationship between
child
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the child
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and caretakers.
For instance
,
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study was held which included joint
families
and nuclear
families
, the results
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that
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the
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joint
families
spend more
time
with each other than nuclear
familes
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families
, choosing to stay in
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single family
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generate
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borders between
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children
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and guardians.
On the other hand
, these issues are increasing rapidly.
Furthermore
, youngsters
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to stay abroad with friends at a certain age which causes a problem in personal relationships.
However
, loss of moral values can never be denied,
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generation
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not respect their elders and
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very
less
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patience to deal with problems,
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leads to many mental problems like depression.
For example
, a study shows that
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people staying alone are at a very high risk of getting
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nervous
breakdowns.
To conclude
, to lead a happy and healthy life
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should be good relationships between each
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. Long vacations should be spent
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at least
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a year to understand one another. Staying together is a key solution to every issue.
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Ensure that your introduction clearly presents the topic and your standpoint on it. Avoid generic statements; instead, directly address why young people may spend less time with their families and what the implications of this trend might be.
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In developing your main points, use more concrete and specific examples that directly relate to the reasons why young people might spend less time with their families and the consequences. These examples should clearly support your arguments and help to illustrate your points more vividly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • individualistic values
  • proliferation
  • engage
  • extracurricular activities
  • weakened family bonds
  • traditional values
  • self-reliant
  • social network
  • personal and professional growth
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