The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given table and the pie chart illustrate facts related to
police
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the police
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budget
for 2017 and 2018 in certain
area
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areas
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of Britain.
Overall
, the
budget
was funded by three main
source
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sources
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while
dominated by the national government and compared to 2017 it had
been
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apply
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increased in the year 2018.
Furthermore
, more fund
expenduture
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expenditure
expenditures
in 2018 on
technological
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the technological
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aspect
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aspects
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is
cardinal
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a cardinal
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feature in 2018. In detail, in the year
2017
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2017,
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total
budget
allocation
is
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was
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304.7 million Em and in 2018 that increased by 13.9 million
whereas
funding from the other
sourses
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sources
courses
remain
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remained
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same
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the same
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.
However
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However,
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more money was allocated from
national
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the national
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government and local taxes to full fill
this
gap in the
budget
report.
Furthermore
, in 2017
three
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a
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fourth of
expenditure
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the expenditure
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had been on salaries and the percentage value
reduced
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was reduced
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by around 6% in the next year
while
spending on
thecnology
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technology
was
nerly
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nearly
doubled in 2018 compared to 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words budget with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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