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Some people think that the best way to find accurate information is to use the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #information #internet
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 allows us to acquire information about the topic we are interested in. And not only by searching the topics but
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 us aware of the events going around us. Nowadays most
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people
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prefers
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 to use
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the internet
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internet
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 to
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 to find information. They
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do
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 not in need to go and see
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famous places because the
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 allows us to learn and see everything deeply.
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internet
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 harmful than being informative. As I mentioned before if you have
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access to
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the
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internet
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then
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for example
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 you would not even
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 go and see some
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 places and countries or spend effort to go and meet your acquaintances. Because your
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 connection already provides you with calling the
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 and some informative and explanatory videos of contents you want to learn about. So if
people
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 use the
internet
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 properly and for beneficial
reason
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reasons
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the
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they
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 can easily increase their knowledge and will not have to look for
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 and articles to read or study predominantly.
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However
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 there is not that much big difference between
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internet
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the internet
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 and the society that abandoned the
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. Sometimes the
internet
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 and social media can be very
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 and waste our
times
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time
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in
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watching or reading absurd or even harmful things
whereas
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 in real life the most needed information is not that hard to find and has a
big
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 variety of
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 that's why the living without the
internet
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 doesn't mean that it causes ignorance.
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 it has you to read more and reinforce your knowledge or even your personality.
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 are often considered to be very fruitful and useful resources
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for discovering
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 and
learn
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 about the world.
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 find tons of data
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on
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internet
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 whether it's useful or not but
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allows
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allow
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 you to learn about any topic more deeply than the
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 does. But
still
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still,
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 the usage of the
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 outweighs the actual benefits of reading
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.
This
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people
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books
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 over the
internet
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.
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