The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.

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The table shows the different preferences of

age

groups (11-15, 15-20 and 21-25) regarding

programs in a European country in

year

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2012.

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, It can be seen that as

the

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age

increases, the preference for news, soap

opera

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operas

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dramas and sports increases significantly

while

decreases for cartoons and

features

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feature

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films.

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The 11

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-15

age

group

likes cartoons the most with nearly a third of

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follwed

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followed

by sports,

features

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feature

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films and soap opera with 22%, 18% and 17% respectively. The other two

programs were the least

popluar

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popular

with

percentage

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percentages

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between 6 and 8. For

age

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the age

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group

15-20, figures for watching

cartoon

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cartoons

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features

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films, news and sports were 18%,23%,19% and 18% respectively. Afterwards,

these percenatge

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then

changed to 4%,20%,23% and 21% in

age

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the age

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group

21-25.,

Percentage

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for

dramas and soap opera

were

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around one-tenths of

total

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the total

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for

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the 15

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-20

age

group

On the other hand

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3Word repetition
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5 paragraphs

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The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.

Supermarkets shoul only sell food produced within their own country. What are your opinions about it.

In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What problems is this causing? What measures could be taken to counter this situation?

Many animals are being hunted to the brink of extinction in order to fulfill the demand and greed of mankind for decorative purposes as well as for other reasons such as traditional medicine. How could this be solved?

Fewer students are studying science at school and university, favouring more computer based subjects instead. Is this a positive or negative development? What are the reasons for this?