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The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.

The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.
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The table shows the different preferences of
age
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 groups (11-15, 15-20 and 21-25) regarding
TV
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 programs in a European country in
year
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the year
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 2012.
Overall
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, It can be seen that as
the
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apply
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age
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 increases, the preference for news, soap
opera
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operas
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,
TV
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 dramas and sports increases significantly
while
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 decreases for cartoons and
features
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feature
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 films.
11
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The 11
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-15
age
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group
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 likes cartoons the most with nearly a third of
percentage
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the percentage
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follwed
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followed
 by sports,
features
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feature
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 films and soap opera with 22%, 18% and 17% respectively. The other two
Tv
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 programs were the least
popluar
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popular
 with
percentage
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percentages
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 between 6 and 8. For
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age
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the age
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group
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 15-20, figures for watching
cartoon
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cartoons
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,
features
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feature
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 films, news and sports were 18%,23%,19% and 18% respectively. Afterwards,
these percenatge
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then
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 changed to 4%,20%,23% and 21% in
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age
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the age
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group
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 21-25.,
Percentage
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The percentage
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 for
TV
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 dramas and soap opera
were
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was
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 around one-tenths of
total
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the total
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 for
15
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the 15
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-20
age
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group
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.
On the other hand
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,

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, tv, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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