Some people think that the teenage years are happinest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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other people opine the mature era is more happiness. In

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my point of view, I agree with the latter statement. On the one hand, some fellows opine that in the teenage era, they

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them overthink and stressful of it. For example, we see many young people feeling burnout easily because not being happy and they do not see the beautiful side of their lives.

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, adult life brings more happiness

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find themself calmly and view any situation by feeling happy.

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when they have faced and fought all the emotions during

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, they want to have children to gather their happiness in the family they created. In conclusion, I believe that the more mature we are the more wisely we become.

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happier than our teenage life.

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Task Achievement

Ensure that your essay directly and fully addresses the question asked. You've touched upon both views but need to deepen your discussion on why some believe teenage years are the happiest.

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Include more detailed and varied examples to support your points. The examples used were quite general. Specific, relatable examples will strengthen your arguments.

Coherence & Cohesion

Your essay could benefit from a clearer logical structure. Consider using more explicit signposting phrases like 'Firstly,' 'However,' to guide your reader through your arguments.

Coherence & Cohesion

Make sure every paragraph has a clear main idea and that all sentences within the paragraph support that idea. This will enhance the cohesion of your text.

Coherence & Cohesion

Revise your introduction and conclusion to make sure they clearly state your opinion and summarize the main points of your argument, respectively. This will enhance the presence and clarity of your essay's beginning and end.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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