Some people think that the teenage years are happinest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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teenage lives are

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other people opine the mature era is more happiness. In

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my point of view, I agree with the latter statement. On the one hand, some fellows opine that in the teenage era, they

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them overthink and stressful of it. For example, we see many young people feeling burnout easily because not being happy and they do not see the beautiful side of their lives.

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find themself calmly and view any situation by feeling happy.

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when they have faced and fought all the emotions during

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lives.

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, they want to have children to gather their happiness in the family they created. In conclusion, I believe that the more mature we are the more wisely we become.

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happier than our teenage life.

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Ensure that your essay directly and fully addresses the question asked. You've touched upon both views but need to deepen your discussion on why some believe teenage years are the happiest.

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Include more detailed and varied examples to support your points. The examples used were quite general. Specific, relatable examples will strengthen your arguments.

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Your essay could benefit from a clearer logical structure. Consider using more explicit signposting phrases like 'Firstly,' 'However,' to guide your reader through your arguments.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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