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The given chart provides information about the weekly outcomes of families in 1968 and 2018.

The given chart provides information about the weekly outcomes of families in 1968 and 2018.
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This
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 bar chart depicts
average
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the average
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 weekly spending on items that families bought
from
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between
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 1968 and
in
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apply
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2018. It is clear from the chart that
reduced
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apply
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the average in 2018 on
couple
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a couple
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 of things we will analyse in
next
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the next
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 paragraph.
According to
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 want is shown in 1968, Food experienced quickly soar it
reach
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reaches
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 35%,
otherwise
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 both Housing and clothing and
footware
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footwear
 were
in
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on
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 the same page which is 10%, coming after them Leisure experienced less
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then
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than
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 10%.
However
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 in 2018,
Leisure
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the Leisure
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 percentage
were
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was
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 the highest in 2018 ,another rate is Housing
Furthermore
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 Food
has
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apply
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experienced high than 15%,
then
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 it goes down in Transport is 14%,
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 the fuel and power
nevertheless
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 Personal goods
were
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apply
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rose
in
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apply
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1968,
whereas
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decine
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decline
 is 5% and less in 2018, change out in one rate
that is
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 Household goods were the same is which is 13%.

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