Many countries now face an economic downturn so it is better for each country to focus on its own problems rather than helping other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Increase
in the availability of information Correct article usage
An increase
influence
humanity too much. People have lost their skills Correct subject-verb agreement
influences
with
Change preposition
apply
due to
the internet
. For
example
a lot of people can not use real maps, Add a comma
example,
children
become so lazy and unsociable.The Correct word choice
and children
Internet
is the greatest invent
of humanity it has more benefits than disadvantages. People all over the world communicate with each other, expand their mindset, learn sciences and work. I think Replace the word
invention
internet
should be used less, because the young generation Add an article
the internet
spend
too much time Change the verb form
spends
in
social media and video games. In Change preposition
on
conclusion
I want to say that we should Add a comma
conclusion,
to
use Change the verb form
apply
Add an article
the internet
internet
more for Capitalize word
Internet
self education
Add a hyphen
self-education
,
because it Remove the comma
apply
give
us Change the verb form
gives
a
opportunity to become anyone.Change the article
an
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Task Response
Carefully read the essay prompt and ensure that your response directly addresses the topic given. This essay strayed from the initial topic about countries focusing on their own problems during economic downturns.
Task Response
Develop your ideas fully with clear, specific examples and explanations. This can enhance the persuasiveness and depth of your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each part should serve its purpose: introducing the topic, discussing it, and summarizing your stance.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your essay has a logical flow by using transitions between sentences and paragraphs. This helps readers follow your argument more easily.
General Advice
Revisit the original essay prompt if you become unsure about your direction. Staying on topic is crucial for a high score.
General Improvement
Practice writing on a variety of topics to improve your ability to quickly generate and organize ideas relevant to a given prompt.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite