The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the pattern of tea and
coffee
consumption by Australians in the five different
cities
of
this
country, in
percentage
.
Overall
, it is noticeable that most people went to
coffee
shops to buy these drinks in the
last
four weeks in all the
cities
, except the ones living in Adelaide who are mostly into buying
instant
coffee
. With a comparison between these places, individuals living in Melbourn have the highest
percentage
of going to cafes in the
last
4 weeks with 64% of all,
however
, the data in Horbat and Sydney are so close to the number in Melbourn.
On the other hand
, Horbat has the highest
percentage
of
instant
coffee
consumption, as more than half of the society has been a fan of these kinds of
coffee
in the
last
month. Adelaidians,
therefore
, have the lowest
percentage
overall
for having hot drinks including tea and
coffee
with only half of the notion buying
instant
coffee
. Buying fresh
coffee
in the
last
month,
however
, consists of the lowest
percentage
in all of these five Australian
cities
, with the highest
percentage
belonging to Sydney with less than 45%.
To conclude
, Australians in the five
cities
mentioned are more likely to go to cafes
instead
of having either fresh or
instant
coffee
.
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