The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The
two floor
sketch diagrams illustrate some information about the community library in the past two decades and the current plan. In overview, these two sketches Add a hyphen
two-floor
showing
a great change and Wrong verb form
show
comparing
occurred during a period of twenty years.
To start with, many alters were experienced in the library, since fiction changed into infants' books.Verb problem
comparison that
Furthermore
, tables were small in making
but it Change preposition
to make
changes
when they joined 2 smaller Wrong verb form
changed
Correct pronoun usage
ones into
into
one bigger which means eight pieces make four large. Correct pronoun usage
ones into
Moreover
, entrance
and librarian's seating position remained Correct article usage
the entrance
at
the same place Change preposition
in
as well as
staircases
.
Correct article usage
the staircases
In addition
, children's area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
created
, Add a missing verb
were created
however
, newspapers and periodicals altered
into films and DVDs.Add a missing verb
were altered
Therefore
, self help
and history become smaller, Add a hyphen
self-help
this
is because of adding a kitchen, law and economics which was
introduced at the same time.Correct subject-verb agreement
were
Lastly
, room for computers was added to the floor plan, in the sense that reading will be easier since there
were used to browse newspapers.Correct pronoun usage
they
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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