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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The
two floor
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two-floor
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 sketch diagrams illustrate some information about the community library in the past two decades and the current plan. In overview, these two sketches
showing
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show
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 a great change and
comparing
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comparison that
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 occurred during a period of twenty years. To start with, many alters were experienced in the library, since fiction changed into infants' books.
Furthermore
, tables were small
in making
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to make
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 but it
changes
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changed
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 when they joined 2 smaller
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ones into
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into
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ones into
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 one bigger which means eight pieces make four large.
Moreover
,
entrance
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the entrance
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 and librarian's seating position remained
at
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in
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 the same place
as well as
staircases
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the staircases
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.
In addition
, children's
area
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areas
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created
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were created
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,
however
, newspapers and periodicals
altered
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were altered
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 into films and DVDs.
Therefore
,
self help
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 and history become smaller,
this
 is because of adding a kitchen, law and economics which
was
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were
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 introduced at the same time.
Lastly
, room for computers was added to the floor plan, in the sense that reading will be easier since
there
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they
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 were used to browse newspapers.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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