Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In recent times, changes in
the
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information
technology
has
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changed drastically.
Technology
is
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a double
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double edged
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sword, it
is having
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has
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both a positive and a negative impact
in
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on
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the
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society.
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, most of us are influenced
on
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by
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the latest information
technology
invention
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inventions
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direct
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or indirectly.
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, it is
golden
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times
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of
modern
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the modern
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era,
firstly
medical field has
growing
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enormously with their latest
live saving
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life-saving
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technology
.
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smart
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phones
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smartphones
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is
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used
as
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for
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shopping,
payment
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and payment
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apart from
it
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their
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initial purpose of communication.
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,
whatapp
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whatsapp
makes communication around the
global
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for free. On top of it,
electric
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an electric
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car with full
self driving
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is like
feather
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a feather
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in the cap.
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one
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the one
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hand, it
support
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to reduce
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carbon footprint in the environment. Automobile pollution
which
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plays
crucial
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a crucial
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role in the
green house
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greenhouse
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effect.
In addition
, charging EV
car
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cars
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is
cost effective
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cost-effective
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when compared with fuel price.
Although
there are many benefits, on the other
hands
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technology
as
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has
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its own side
effect
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effects
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in
the
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society,
current
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the current
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generation is smarter than their parents
due to
their advanced education,
exposure
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and exposure
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to social media.
For instance
, kids
unable
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to separate wheat and chaff from it. So they fall
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prey to the
technology
.
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,
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shattered many
people
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life
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lives
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in the
last
decades,
later
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and later
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which
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was banned by many countries around the
global
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.
Subsequently
,
technology
has deteriorated the mankind's health.
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, In
last
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the last
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, couple of decades, people
are
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addicted to
smart phone
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smartphone
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. They don't give importance to exercise or family like in the past, which led to the increase in diabetes and blood pressure,
heart
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and heart
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attack cases, which is
root
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the root
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cause of
live-threating
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life-threatening
disease
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diseases
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.
Although
technology
has
own
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its own
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adverse
effect
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effects
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on
the
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society like addiction to
smart phones
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smartphones
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and ruining the young generation in online games, it has its own benefits by saving
person
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people
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living
by
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with
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the latest medical field
technology
, improving
the
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people's
life style
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lifestyles
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, and
pollution free
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creating a polluted
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environment. I would conclude that
advantages
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the advantages
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has out weighted
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outweigh
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the disadvantages.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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