Gender imbalance in some occupations is evident. To what extent do you think that it is acceptable?

In light of emphasizing effectiveness and efficiency in work, it is apparent that the proportion of

gender

in certain

domain

Fix the agreement mistake

domains

show examples

,

such

as early childhood education, marketing and firemen, is distinct. In my opinion,

this

phenomenon is appropriate and acceptable

although

may cause some controversies on

gender

discrimination. It is ubiquitous knowledge that one of the best ways to maximize one’s talent

Change preposition

in

show examples

on

Change preposition

in

show examples

their

Fix the agreement mistake

job

show examples

jobs

Fix the agreement mistake

job

show examples

is to take advantage

Change preposition

of

show examples

from

Change preposition

of

show examples

their natural personality on

gender

Change the noun form

genders

show examples

such

as emotional sensitivity or sympathy

Change preposition

for

show examples

on

Change preposition

for

show examples

Fix the agreement mistake

females

show examples

female

Fix the agreement mistake

females

show examples

, and strength in power or quick decision making in

Fix the agreement mistake

males

show examples

male

Fix the agreement mistake

males

show examples

. Take early childhood education

for example

,

this

job demands both professional knowledge

on

Change preposition

of

show examples

education and adequate patience and love

on

Change preposition

for

show examples

children, which

is

Correct subject-verb agreement

are

show examples

of value

Change preposition

valued

show examples

natural qualities

on

Change preposition

for

show examples

female

Fix the agreement mistake

females

show examples

.

As a consequence

, it is easier for

female

Fix the agreement mistake

females

show examples

to be successful

on

Change preposition

in

show examples

this

field than

male

Fix the agreement mistake

males

show examples

. Another benefit comes from different

responsibility

Fix the agreement mistake

responsibilities

show examples

depending on

gender

.

As

Change preposition

For

show examples

a female, maternity is inevitable, which

is mean

Wrong verb form

means

show examples

at least 3 months

maternity

Change preposition

of maternity

show examples

leave should be given and leaving their position

on

Change preposition

for

show examples

such

long

Correct article usage

a long

show examples

time is not good for the employer.

As a result

,

on

Change preposition

in

show examples

certain essential and highly

pressure

Wrong verb form

pressured

show examples

positions,

such

as business leaders and CEO that affect the development of

company

Correct article usage

the company

show examples

directly, the employer would like to choose

male

Fix the agreement mistake

males

show examples

to take those roles.

This

imbalance in occupations should be treated with kindness toward

female

Fix the agreement mistake

females

show examples

.

On the other hand

, those who have big ambitions

on

Change preposition

for

show examples

career or special qualifies argue that

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

job

opportunity

Fix the agreement mistake

opportunities

show examples

should be decided by

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

capability

instead

of

gender

and

this

gender

discrimination is unacceptable. There is no doubt that fair competition contributes to not only the

health

Replace the word

healthy

show examples

development of

economy

Correct article usage

the economy

show examples

but

also

the harmony of society.

Overall

,

gender

determines the suitable jobs

in

Change preposition

to

show examples

some extent, and we should comply with

this

Correct determiner usage

these

show examples

natural rules.

But

Correct word choice

However

show examples

the exception should be considered in some cases.