The table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during peroid 2011-12.
The given chart illustrates the
number
of people aged over 15 who took part in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during the period 2011-12.
Overall
it can be seen that,
football and swimming were the most popular sport for Remove the comma
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boys
and girls
respectively, whereas
tennis was the least favoured one for both genders. Besides
, more females than males chose swimming, skiing, and hiking, while
the opposite was true for the remaining.
To begin
with, there were almost 70 boys
who took part in football whereas
the number
of girls
was one-third of that of boys
. Next,
nearly 60 males opted for cycling whereas
40 females joined in this
sport. Regarding swimming, the number
of female participants
was 53, 5 participants
more than that of males.
Moving on to the other categories, the number
of girls
who took part in skiing and hiking was higher 2 participants
than of boys
being involved in these types of activities. In particular
, there were 27 and 25 female participants
who joined in skiing and hiking respectively. Lastly
, about 25 boys
participated in tennis and 19 participants
were girls
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