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Everybody should be allowed admission to university or college programs7 regardless of their level of academic ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, getting into a good university requires more
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 than skills.There is a debate that all
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 must be taken into universities without considering their academic
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. In my opinion, I partly disagree with
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 statement because some
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 do need to consider the
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 obtained by the
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 to choose the required program.
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 with, some of the negatives of not considering academic abilities are that some
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 require higher
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 and academic interest of a person.
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 choosing
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 like medicine requires full dedication and depends on how much a
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 can study.
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 is because in medicine the
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 has to complete around 19 subjects which might be difficult for a mediocre
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 to complete
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student
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 might drop out in the middle so it is necessary to consider their academic ability before giving admission in
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 type of program.
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, some programs do not require academic
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.
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, fashion designing and
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courses
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 do not have to consider the
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 or the academic status of the
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 because these
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 do not need much studying. It only requires the skills and personal interest of the person.
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, if academic
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 is being considered for
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 programs a lot of talented
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 might not get a chance to pursue their dream program. In conclusion, considering the academic ability of a
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 is important for programs
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 as medicine so it could avoid dropouts in later periods
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 it is not essential to consider academic
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 for certain
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 like arts and
designing
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 as it may neglect the talented ones.

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