Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What the advantages and disadvantages of this?
Some would argue that air delivery is
good
way to increase supplies of Add an article
a good
grocery
Fix the agreement mistake
groceries
while
others can’t provide any benefits. Shipping by plane can improves
people’s diet, Change the verb form
improve
some
experts Correct word choice
but some
says
it damages our nature.
The main advantage Change the verb form
say
to get
fresh grain and greens fast Change preposition
of getting
that
it makes our shopping cart more varied and useful for Add a missing verb
is that
the
nutrition. Correct article usage
apply
This
enables society to buy such
exotic types of food as bananas, tangerines, mango
and Fix the agreement mistake
mangoes
avocado
Fix the agreement mistake
avocados
according to
nutrition’s
recommendations during Change noun form
nutrition
all
Correct determiner usage
the
year
season. Correct your spelling
all-year
For example
, citizens of Astana easily can buy strawberries at every food market even in winter. It’s possible for one reason-air
cargo.
Consuming fresh food all of us Correct your spelling
reason
becomes
accomplices in environmental pollution. Airplanes really Correct subject-verb agreement
become
hurts
nature, Change the verb form
hurt
the
reason for Correct word choice
and the
this
is burning fuel during the flight. For example
, fuel
used for planes is petroleum. It consists of 86% Carbone and 14% Hydrogen. Airbus A320 incinerates 2400 liters in Correct article usage
the fuel
hour
damaging our planet.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
an hour
although
aircraft helps our diet to become richer of
vitamins and wider in choice, it Change preposition
in
also
causes damage to nature, so we have to use it reasonable
.Change the adjective
reasonably
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task response
Provide a more explicit thesis statement in your introduction, specifying clearly the advantages and disadvantages you will discuss.
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Ensure a more logical flow by clearly connecting ideas with a greater variety of linking words and phrases. This could include contrasting connectors to better distinguish the advantages from the disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
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