Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Some would argue that air delivery is
good
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way to increase supplies of
grocery
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while
others can’t provide any benefits. Shipping by plane can
improves
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people’s diet,
some
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experts
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it damages our nature. The main advantage
to get
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fresh grain and greens fast
that
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it makes our shopping cart more varied and useful for
the
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nutrition.
This
enables society to buy
such
exotic types of food as bananas, tangerines,
mango
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mangoes
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and
avocado
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avocados
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according to
nutrition’s
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recommendations during
all
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year
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season.
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, citizens of Astana easily can buy strawberries at every food market even in winter. It’s possible for one
reason-air
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cargo. Consuming fresh food all of us
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accomplices in environmental pollution. Airplanes really
hurts
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nature,
the
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reason for
this
is burning fuel during the flight.
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used for planes is petroleum. It consists of 86% Carbone and 14% Hydrogen. Airbus A320 incinerates 2400 liters in
hour
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damaging our planet. In conclusion,
although
aircraft helps our diet to become richer
of
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vitamins and wider in choice, it
also
causes damage to nature, so we have to use it
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Provide a more explicit thesis statement in your introduction, specifying clearly the advantages and disadvantages you will discuss.
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Ensure a more logical flow by clearly connecting ideas with a greater variety of linking words and phrases. This could include contrasting connectors to better distinguish the advantages from the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export
  • import
  • perishable goods
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • supply chain disruptions
  • economic benefits
  • culinary experiences
  • broader market
  • local produce
  • agricultural industries
  • external sources
  • competition
  • outcompete
  • vulnerable
  • high costs
  • freshness
  • accessibility
  • out of season
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