You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter correct the information in the ahicle explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation
Sebastián Hernández, 3245648753, Bogotá D.C.
Travel
magazine
Writing department
Dear Capitalize word
Magazine
editor
I'm writing to focus Capitalize word
Editor
in
some mistakes Change preposition
on
about
your Change preposition
in
last
publication, specifically wrong information about my town that I would like to proofread.
To begin
with, in your article
you are claiming that Bogotá is located Add a comma
article,
at
the north of the country, Change preposition
in
that is
a geographic error since Bogotá is located in the center
of Colombia. Change the spelling
centre
Secondly
, reading about weather
you state that people don't need to go without warm clothes Correct article usage
the weather
due to
intense warm temperatures, this
is incorrect because Bogotá is one of the coldest communities whereas
is compulsory to go with warm clothes.
As you can see, there are important fake data you are providing to the readers and active travelers
Change the spelling
travellers
which
decided Correct pronoun usage
who
come
here Fix the infinitive
to come
in
behalf Change preposition
on
your
article, Change preposition
of your
that is
why is crutially
important to do Correct your spelling
crucially
critically
a
previous research about a Remove the article
apply
place
before formulate
a wrong idea of a Change the verb form
formulating
place
. It can be a problem for all, the magazine lose
luxury and confidence, you jeopardize your credibility, my town Change the verb form
loses
get
Change the verb form
gets
acknowledge
as a scam Wrong verb form
acknowledged
place
and we will lose tourist
economy. And Correct article usage
the tourist
finally
the Add a comma
finally,
traveler
, who Change the spelling
traveller
get
annoyed and frustrated.
Correct subject-verb agreement
gets
To sum up
, change the information, read and search carefully about a place
before writing. As a recommendation, I'm willing to help you and I encourage to
talk with native people.
Thanks, and best wishes.
Sebastian Hernandez.Correct pronoun usage
you to
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to maintain clarity. Your letter mixes several points in single paragraphs. Structuring paragraphs around one main idea will help readers follow your argument more easily.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly. This would include expressions for adding information, contrasting, giving examples, concluding, etc., to improve the flow of your writing.
Task Achievement
To fully satisfy the task requirements, make sure to address all parts of the prompt in enough detail. Your letter could elaborate more on why accurate information is crucial and provide more specific suggestions for how the magazine can rectify the situation.
Task Achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter for consistency. While your tone is generally appropriate, there are instances where informal expressions are used ('fake data,' 'scam place'). Using consistently formal language would better suit the context of writing to an editor.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.