You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter correct the information in the ahicle explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Sebastián Hernández, 3245648753, Bogotá D.C. Travel
magazine
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Writing department Dear
editor
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Editor
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I'm writing to focus
in
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on
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some mistakes
about
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in
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your
last
publication, specifically wrong information about my town that I would like to proofread.
To begin
with, in your
article
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you are claiming that Bogotá is located
at
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in
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the north of the country,
that is
a geographic error since Bogotá is located in the
center
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of Colombia.
Secondly
, reading about
weather
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you state that people don't need to go without warm clothes
due to
intense warm temperatures,
this
is incorrect because Bogotá is one of the coldest communities
whereas
is compulsory to go with warm clothes. As you can see, there are important fake data you are providing to the readers and active
travelers
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travellers
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which
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who
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decided
come
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to come
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here
in
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behalf
your
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of your
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article,
that is
why is
crutially
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crucially
critically
important to do
a
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previous research about a
place
before
formulate
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a wrong idea of a
place
. It can be a problem for all, the magazine
lose
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loses
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luxury and confidence, you jeopardize your credibility, my town
get
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acknowledge
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as a scam
place
and we will lose
tourist
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the tourist
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economy. And
finally
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finally,
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the
traveler
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traveller
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, who
get
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gets
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annoyed and frustrated.
To sum up
, change the information, read and search carefully about a
place
before writing. As a recommendation, I'm willing to help you and I encourage
to
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you to
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talk with native people. Thanks, and best wishes. Sebastian Hernandez.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to maintain clarity. Your letter mixes several points in single paragraphs. Structuring paragraphs around one main idea will help readers follow your argument more easily.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly. This would include expressions for adding information, contrasting, giving examples, concluding, etc., to improve the flow of your writing.
Task Achievement
To fully satisfy the task requirements, make sure to address all parts of the prompt in enough detail. Your letter could elaborate more on why accurate information is crucial and provide more specific suggestions for how the magazine can rectify the situation.
Task Achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter for consistency. While your tone is generally appropriate, there are instances where informal expressions are used ('fake data,' 'scam place'). Using consistently formal language would better suit the context of writing to an editor.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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