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the graph below shows the percentages of people in different age groups to the gym at least once a month in Europe from 1998 to 2018 and the projection

the graph below shows the percentages of people in different age groups to the gym at least once a month in Europe from 1998 to 2018 and the projection
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The given line graph has provided data for the proportion of
people
 in different age
groups
 visiting gyms between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, the number of
people
 who visited the
gym
 in the 18-24 and 25-34 age
groups
 observed a sharp rise,
whereas
 the 35-44 and over 45
groups
 experienced a slight upward trend.
Additionally
,
people
 over 45 were less likely to go to the gymnasium throughout the whole timeframe. Taking a closer look at the 18 to 34 age
groups
, the number of
people
 who visited the
gym
 in the 18-24
group
 went up to approximately 15% by 1994 from just below 9% in 1990 and continued to incrementally increase to 50% in 2004, followed by fluctuations between 50% and 60% in 2010. Regarding the 25-34
group
, those who went to the
gym
 witnessed a rise from 10% in 1990 to 30% in 1998,
then
 climbed to just above 40% by 2006 before reaching a high of 50% in 2010. Turning to the over 35
groups
, the 35-44
group
 had a slight change to 20% in 2002 from roughly 5% in 1990.
This
 was followed by a gradual increase to around 22% in 2006 and ended up just below 40% in 2010. With respect to the over-45
group
, the number of
people
 who hit the
gym
 steadily increased to 10% from around 5% in 2004 and 1990, respectively.
Subsequently
, the figure experienced a sharp surge to over 20% by the end of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, groups, gym, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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