It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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that some persons
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some
talents
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sports
but many
people
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no natural
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many
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that all
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can develop their talent in fields
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sports
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both
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regarding to it It is
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comman
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common
understanding in all sets of
people
that
people
are born with some
talents
naturally by birth and it is true that
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quantity of
people
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born.
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some
people
in
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personalities
like Sachin, plays cricket right from his 4th grade,
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player Messi,
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plays
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professional
football
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of 7
both
these players had very level
talents
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their
respected
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sports
. But
both
environment and family supported them to achieve
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true talent. And these are not
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society no one sees the
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struggles
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and problems that they face,
people
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the success
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the suffering that they went through. So
people
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that
talents
can be created,
developed
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and developed
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in any child, by proper education or training. And we do have several examples in
both
fields of music, and
sports
.
For
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take M.S Dhoni he started his
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by
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playing
playin'
football
and
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his
sports
coach, with his instructions he changed his
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preferred
sports
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, from
football
to cricket. And with all the
guidence
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guidance
he played very well for India he won several
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silverware
silverwares
for his country.
This
proves
talents
can
also
be developed by providing good
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training
and
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. To
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conclude
concede
this
essay, yes there are some
people
who have natural
talents
, and some can develop it bu through good training. But we need help from factors like family, environment, society and
governmnets
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governments
government
to help our child,
to
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achieve in any respected field discipline is very much needed in any profession and field that we choose.
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introduction conclusion present
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Address the task directly by discussing both views presented in the question fully before giving your own opinion. Make sure each view is explored thoroughly to fully answer the question.
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Use relevant and specific examples to support your claims. You’ve made a good start with examples of sports personalities, but try to incorporate a wider range of evidence and explain how it supports your point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate abilities
  • genetic make-up
  • inherent aptitude
  • nurturing environment
  • rigorous training
  • proficient
  • initial advantage
  • consistent practice
  • perseverance
  • quality training
  • prodigies
  • dedication
  • long-term success
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