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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for
last
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 year.
Overall
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, in the given chart, South Asia has the highest percentage of illiterate people
while
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 Developed countries have the lowest.
On the other hand
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,
females
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 who are illiterate are more than
males
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 in every region.
According to
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 the chart, we can see that there are about 55
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percent
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per cent
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 of illiterate
females
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 in South Asia and around 34
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percent
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per cent
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 of illiterate
males
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, which is the most illiteracy region. In Sub-Saharan Africa, there are about 49
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 of illiterate
females
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 and around 31
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 of illiterate
males
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. East Asia/ Oceania has a lower percentage of illiterate people rather than the two regions I mentioned above, which has 20
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 of illiterate
females
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 and about 8
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percent
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 of illiterate
males
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. Developed Countries
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 the lowest percentage of people who are
illiterates
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illiterate
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, which has under 5
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percent
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 of illiterate
female
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females
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 and almost
none
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no
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 illiterate
males
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, males, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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