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The increasing popularity of online learning has led some to believe that traditional classroom learning will become obsolete. Do you agree with this view? Discuss both sides of the argument and give your own opinion.

#popularity #classroom #argument
Online learning has
becoming
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 a big trend in today's society,
hence
 it creates an argument whether
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 method of teaching in
classroom
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 will be outdated. In my point of view, I agree that virtual classrooms will eventually replace real ones.
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the positives
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 and negatives of online learning. Studying through online platforms gives more opportunities to people that
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 limited access to
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form
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 of education.
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, those who need to work full-time are forced to apply for
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 program of
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 degree that costs more, so distance learning on platforms allows them to have more choices in study.
Moreover
, it
also
 provides
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access to
intructors
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instructors
 and courses from various institutions around the world, which widen the perspectives and experiences of students by inter-cultural sharing in classes.
However
, the main drawback of learning online is the minimum requirement
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 devices to be used. Electronics,
such
 as computers, headphones, internet, may cost a lot of money,
while
 using lower quality devices may
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 an
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 in studying, i.e. unstable connection during live sessions. In conclusion,
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the
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online studying provides
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more
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 flexible style of studying,
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enable
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 more people to learn, but it
also
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need
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 devices.
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coherence cohesion
To enhance your coherence, focus on creating a clearer link between paragraphs. Using transitional phrases can smoothly guide the reader through your argument, ensuring a more cohesive flow of ideas.
task achievement
For a higher score in task achievement, ensure your essay addresses all parts of the prompt thoroughly. This entails not only discussing the benefits and drawbacks of online learning, but also explaining why you believe it will replace traditional classrooms, supported by clear examples and reasoning.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are strong, indicating a good start and finish to your essay. To improve, ensure that your conclusion clearly summarizes your arguments and reaffirms your stance on the issue, effectively closing the discussion.
task achievement
Incorporate a wider range of examples and deeper analysis to strengthen your main points. This adds depth to your essay and demonstrates a comprehensive understanding of the topic, which can significantly improve your task achievement score.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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