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the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particulat carribean island between 2010 and 2017. summarise the informattion by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

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This
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 line graph illustrates how many visitors have
traveled
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 to Caribbean islands in the period of time from 2010 to 2017. The
data
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 depicts the ones that stayed on ships, stayed on the island, and the total
number
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.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that most of the visitors spent their time staying on the island until 2015,
while
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 the plot twisted in 2016, as people tend to prefer staying on the cruise and the
data
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 continued until 2017. With a comparison between the provided
data
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, in the first
year
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, almost 1
million
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 tourists spent their journey on the island and it continued until the next
year
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. The
number
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 rose slightly afterward and it reached 1.5
million
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 for three years in a row, starting from 2013 until 2015,
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, it did not continue, as the
data
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 had a plateau and the
number
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 decreased to 1.3
million
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then
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 reached the previous
number
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 again.
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, less than half of a
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 people stayed on cruise ships in the beginning,
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,
this
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number
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 went through an unstable change and reached 1
million
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 by 2014,
then
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 increased sharply as it eventually showed the
number
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 of 2
million
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 visitors staying on these ships by the end of 2017. The total
number
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,
moreover
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, increased from the first
year
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 starting from 1
million
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 individuals and reaching almost 3
million
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 in 2015, and remained the same in 2016, but rose
up
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sharply and reached the maximum
number
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 of 3.5
million
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 in the
last
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year
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 of
this
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 period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words data, number, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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