The graph below and the chart on the next page show the answers people gave about the extent to which they are satisfied with their lives and what they think would make them happiest.
The provided figure represents the data
of
how people Change preposition
on
pleased
with their Add a missing verb
are pleased
life
. The information is given by a time in each different age. Overview, it is obvious that both boys and girls tend to be happy with Fix the agreement mistake
lives
life
at a very young and old age.
The previous picture illustrate
the evaluation line Change the verb form
illustrates
graph
of what is the best time of happiness. The research show
that the male's Change the verb form
shows
graph
starting
at a higher position than Wrong verb form
starts
a
female, which is 5.5 and 5.3. Correct article usage
the
Moreover
, the growth affects quite a lot in terms of living, because at the age around 21-30, the line graph
declined less than 0.5 and its graph
continued extremely plummeting to 0.5 at 41-50 years old which is the middle time of life
. As you can see the following year, the record started to claimed
up from the Verb problem
climb
worstest
point ,which Correct your spelling
worst
mean
people might Change the verb form
means
concern
more on the happiness of their living for the rest of Verb problem
be
life
between 51-70
years old. The evaluation line Correct word choice
and 70
start
to Wrong verb form
started
surged
, but there Wrong verb form
surge
are
a little Wrong verb form
was
stoped
point at 5.2 for a moment. Correct your spelling
stopped
Addiotionally
, Correct your spelling
Additionally
road
to 70 years Add an article
the road
Change the verb form
is
are considerably skyrocket
to Change the verb form
are considerably skyrocketed
are considerably skyrocketing
reached
the highest position at 5.6.Wrong verb form
reach
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