The graph below and the chart on the next page show the answers people gave about the extent to which they are satisfied with their lives and what they think would make them happiest.

The graph below and the chart on the next page show the answers people gave about the extent to which they are satisfied with their lives and what they think would make them happiest.
The provided figure represents the data
of
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how people
pleased
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are pleased
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with their
life
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lives
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. The information is given by a time in each different age. Overview, it is obvious that both boys and girls tend to be happy with
life
at a very young and old age. The previous picture
illustrate
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the evaluation line
graph
of what is the best time of happiness. The research
show
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that the male's
graph
starting
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at a higher position than
a
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female, which is 5.5 and 5.3.
Moreover
, the growth affects quite a lot in terms of living, because at the age around 21-30, the line
graph
declined less than 0.5 and its
graph
continued extremely plummeting to 0.5 at 41-50 years old which is the middle time of
life
. As you can see the following year, the record started to
claimed
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up from the
worstest
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worst
point ,which
mean
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people might
concern
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be
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more on the happiness of their living for the rest of
life
between 51-
70
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and 70
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years old. The evaluation line
start
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to
surged
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, but there
are
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a little
stoped
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stopped
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point at 5.2 for a moment.
Addiotionally
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,
road
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the road
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to 70 years
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are considerably skyrocket
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are considerably skyrocketed
are considerably skyrocketing
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to
reached
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the highest position at 5.6.
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