The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The graph shows the

population

percentage

of living

cities

in four countries, i.e. Philippines,

Malaysia

Thailand

and

Indonesia

. The x-axis is the representative year which shows the

population

percentage

(y-axis) every ten

years

Malaysia

and

Indonesia

have had a progressive

percentage

population

Add an article

the population

show examples

living in the

cities

over the

years

and

predicted

Add a missing verb

are predicted

show examples

to grow in the next 20

years

while

Thailand

had a relatively stagnant growth

Change preposition

from

show examples

1990 to 2020, around 30% of their total

population

Change preposition

From

show examples

1990 to 2010, the

Philippine's

Change noun form

Philippine

show examples

population

percentage

living in

cities

had

Unnecessary verb

apply

show examples

decreased and started to increase in 2020. In 2020, the most urbanized country was

Malaysia

, followed by

Indonesia

, Philippines and

Thailand

. It is predicted that the ranking

would

Wrong verb form

will

show examples

be the same in 20

years

ahead with all

increasing

Correct article usage

the increasing

show examples

trends of

population

Add an article

the population

show examples

living in the

cities

Malaysia

will reach over 80% of their

population

living in the

cities

in 2030 and 2040.

Indonesia

will slightly get over 60% but

Philippines

Correct article usage

the Philippines

show examples

and

Thailand

will not exceed the number of 60%.

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