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The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the average price
change
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 of
three
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 metals for each month of 2014. In general, Nickel’s trend
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the
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experienced the most fluctuation,
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 copper was the most stable among the
three
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. Another notable trend is the decrease in price for all
three
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 metals during the period from February to May. In January, nickel saw the highest
change
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 of six per
cent
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 before it experienced a major drop until June, resulting in a decrease of
three
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 per
cent
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, the lowest in the particular year. It
then
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 gradually rose back up, ending with
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one
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cent
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of
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change
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 in December. Zinc started the year with
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one
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 per
cent
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change
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 and rose to
three
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cent
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 by February.
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, it constantly decreased to negative
one
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cent
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 by June. Despite the drop, Zinc managed to have
higher
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 number than other metals by the end of the year.
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, Copper exhibited the most consistent trend of all. Its changes fluctuated gradually, with the difference in price between January and December being under
one
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 per
cent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, three, cent, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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