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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The map shows a construction suggestion made by planners of a city named Brandfield which offers to put 3 buildings up. The
center
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 of the place is surrounded by transportation roads and 3 places, a leisure facility, one residential area and an estate for industrial purposes. The city has both rail and
road way
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roadway
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 and a river runs through it. One of the designed
site
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 named S1 was planned to
built
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at
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the
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north of the center, surrounded by rail
road
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, the river and the way, whilst the other was
estimaded
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estimated
 to
construct
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 to the
south-east
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 part of the location, between the
road
 and the rails. It is clear from the map that city planners have no idea where to put the shopping
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 and
therefore
this
 part of the question cannot be answered by myself. If I
was
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 the one to decide on
this
 matter, depending on the size of the mall, I would say it could be placed
in
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 the
east-side
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 between the river and the
road
,
however
, building it
to
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in
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 the area between S1 and
industrial
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the industrial
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 estate would be better for transactional reasons.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city planners
  • proposed
  • shopping mall
  • the main features
  • comparisons
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • recommendation
  • site selection
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