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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The Diagram illustrates the Making of
Electricity
 and
their
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its
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usage
 in
top
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the top
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 Ten Countries in 2014.
Overall
, Every
country
that is
 shown in
this
 Graph
Make
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Makes
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 more
Electricity
 Than their Use of
Energy
acxept
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except
 one
country
,
that is
 Germany. Their Consumption is more than their
production
 of
Electricity
.
Firstly
, China Holds the
Number
 one
Spot
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spot
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 in
this
 list with the most making
energy
 with
number
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a number
the number
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 of 5.398kWh and
Correct article usage
a counsumption
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counsumption
Correct your spelling
consumption
 of 5.322
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is just
Slightly
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slightly
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 below their
Production
.
Moreover
, America Is just behind China
for
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in
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 Producing
Electricity
 and
their
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apply
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Usage
 with
number
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a number
the number
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 of (4.099) for Making
Electricity
 and 3.866 for their use.
On the other hand
,
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the Korea
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Korea
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Korean
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 Republic Is the
most least
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least
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Electricity
 producing
Country
 and
Also
 in
Cousumption
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consumption
.
In Addition
, Germany is
only
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the only
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country
in
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on
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 the list,
there
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their
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usage
 of
Electricity
 is Just cross their
production
 of
Energy
. With the
number
, (526.6)
production
 and (582.5)
cousumption
Correct your spelling
consumption
.
Furthermore
, Every Other
Country
 In
this
 list
making
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makes
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 more
energy
 than their
Usage
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, usage, country, energy, production, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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