Music has always been and continues to be the universal language of mankind. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Music
has been a crutiall
tool in history Correct your spelling
crucial
critical
on
culture exchange and international communication, and it will constantly Change preposition
for
playing
its role in time to come. Wrong verb form
play
Therefore
, I agree with the statement wholeheartly
.
Correct your spelling
wholeheartedly
People
have been using music
to convey messages and share
values in various global events for centries
. As an indispensable representation of art, Correct your spelling
centuries
music
carries important messages in
different occasions. Change preposition
on
For example
, the hosting country of the Olympic Games has been playing their other local music
in the Openning
Ceremony for decades, in order to express their welcome and display their culture to the world. Correct your spelling
Opening
Additionally
, well-known artists have been invited to perform for the World Cup to share
the core value of collaboration through their music
.
Music
will serve as a bridge connecting individuals together in the future as it does not require specific skills to sense or understand. Conventional way
of Change the noun form
ways
comminucation
Correct your spelling
communication
such
as writing and speaking require a wide range of vocabulary of the according language. However
, people
are able to share
common feelings and emotions from music
without barriers of educational level. Such
non-verbal connection brings listeners closer. Furthermore
, some songs can even unite people
even if they are far from each other. National songs, for example
, always raise the sense of belonging from the bottom of one's heart,
and Remove the comma
apply
reminds
Correct subject-verb agreement
remind
people
of their homeland.
To conclude
, music
may carry messages on various themes and deliver diverse culture
to the world, bringing different values and history. It is Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
also
easier for people
from distinguished backgrounds to share
the same information and emotion through music
, which brings them closer with out
language limitations. Correct your spelling
without
Therefore
, music
will continue to be the universal bond of all mankind.Submitted by lizixuan555 on
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task achievement
Ensure all paragraphs are well-developed with specific examples. While you've provided examples like the Olympic Games and World Cup, further details or more varied examples could enrich the essay further.
coherence cohesion
Continue to maintain clear paragraphing with specific topic sentences as you have done. This greatly aids coherence and cohesion.
general
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical accuracy (e.g., 'crucial' instead of 'crutiall', 'centuries' instead of 'centries'). Frequent errors can hinder the reader's understanding and affect your score.
coherence cohesion
To strengthen the introduction and conclusion, ensure the thesis statement in the introduction summarizes the main points, and the conclusion reinforces them without introducing new ideas.
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